Lyrics maybe?

Subject: Lyrics maybe? Mon Nov 17, 2008 12:58 am

For the first time in a while I sat down and started to write a song yesterday. Not sure what direction this is going in. I want to try something other than verse chorus verse chorus middle chorus chorus, so I was thinking maybe just write more verses and come up with a folk-type song. Hmmm... Would be good to go a little different this time anyhow. Has a way to go yet in any case.

It's a dark nght tonight
And the snow white moon is glowing
And it lighens up a tiny gap
In the thick dark charcoal clouds
And I'm alone upon a hilltop
With a city at my feet
And the sky is stained with amber
From the burning lights below

Looking up makes you feel tiny
That's what they alwys say
A person is so small next to
The great expanse above
But looking at the sky tonight
With the grass between my toes
I'm standing on a hilltop
With a city at my feet.
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Subject: Re: Lyrics maybe? Mon Nov 17, 2008 9:06 am

Wow - work in development perhaps ... but I want to see more - me, with my awful powers of visualisation, was actually sitting on that hilltop and looking up at the cosmos and the city below ...

MORE PLEASE, AOIFE!!!
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Subject: Re: Lyrics maybe? Mon Nov 17, 2008 11:23 pm

By jove I think she's got it... Check it out.

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It's a dark nght tonight
And the snow white moon is glowing
And it lighens up a tiny gap
In the thick dark charcoal clouds
And I'm alone upon a hilltop
With a city at my feet
And the sky is stained with amber
From the burning lights below

Looking up makes you feel tiny
That's what they always say
A person is so small next to
The great expanse above
But looking at the sky tonight
With the grass between my toes
I'm standing on a hilltop
With a city at my feet.

Behind me there's a fire now
The distant roar of flames
It blazes in a circle
Of dancing pounding feet
A power like a flood
That thumps within the veins
And burns brighter than the lights
Of the city at my feet.

I close my eyes and turn
The warmth is like a wave
And I step towards the fire
And it's fierce and burning song
There's a gap amongst the dancers
And my pulse is joined already
And I spin right off that hilltop
With the song in head and feet

The clouds are drawn aside
As my toes stretch to the rhythm
Something primal, something spiral
As I'm flung among the stars
And I'm twisting and I'm twirling
For an everlasting second
Hear the echo of beginning
And the harbinger of end

Then I'm drifting down and landing
And I'm somewhere on a hilltop
On a hilltop near a city
With the grass between my toes
And I'm drifting then I'm standing
As I know I always was
As light and bright as ever
And as steady as a stone
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"You're turned on by rented shoes?!"
"That's not the issue..."

Both optimists and pessimists contribute to the society. The optimist invents the aeroplane, the pessimist the parachute.
--George Bernard Shaw

Subject: Re: Lyrics maybe? Tue Nov 18, 2008 10:03 am

Fantastic lyrics ... do you have any music for it yet (or any idea of how you would want it to sound)?
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Subject: Re: Lyrics maybe? Tue Nov 18, 2008 11:58 am

No, not yet.

I was thinking of a folkish tune and then moved onto a kind of 10000 miles by mary chapin carpenter (that song off fly way home) country ballad. But I'm not sure if that would be rhythmic enough to carry the words so I think I'm back to the folk ditty idea. I'll let you klnow if I come up with anything fantastical. Or anything unfantastical for that matter! lol
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Subject: Re: Lyrics maybe? Tue Nov 18, 2008 5:55 pm

Hmmmmm .... folkish vs country ballad - do you know, either would work but one thing is certain ... you will know when it comes to you and I am sure it will be perfect.

Just a thought ... what about a folkish country ballad??? lol
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Subject: Re: Lyrics maybe? Thu Nov 20, 2008 3:09 pm

That really is beautiful, I'm impressed. Smile

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